Hi my name is Sharmake
Today my class and I did a proofreading example as a class. The writing at the bottem is my own profread writing.
The Builders
It was a humongous house they built by using Lego. The three brothers names were Ben, Henry, and the baby, he did not have a name so they just called him Baby. They were the first people to build a house out of Lego, and felt proud of their hard work. When their little brother was wrecking the ladder that they made from Lego.
Ben got angry, so he growled the baby, ‘he’s just a little kid” said a tiny voice. “Who said that?” whispered Ben scaredly “I did” came a little voice from behind the gigantic house. It was half-built but already it looked bigger than the universe.
The Brothers quietly tiptoed to the corner of the house, and you won't believe what they did?. when they saw what was making the noise they just stood there jaw dropped, it was a tiny yellow, cute little animal. Suddenly after what seemed like hours [when it was five secconds], Ben said “you look cute” then there was a loud rumble and then boom! the tiny creature turned into a big monster it was so big I don't know how to say how it looks.
great job
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